a) I write on the fly here quite a bit. It’s kind of impossible to be “trying too hard” when you’re writing a lengthy response in a short amount of time with little to no editing.
b) Because my initial post was a personal musing framed for a larger social context, I was very careful in response to separate myself from that consideration. So yes, I can see why someone who is only skeptically reading half the post would find my words redundant. I make no claims that this is my best writing nor peer-reviewed journal worthy.
c) If my stream of consciousness came out far too wordy for your post-doctorate level of perfection, take my disclaimer or leave it. I’m sorry we all can’t be so refined. I’ll be sure to send over a rough draft next time — if you care to present a name or face to the discussion table, anon.